Editorial report 15b

Here is my first editorial report for the final self-reflection project.

ORIGINAL and REVISED Closing paragraph

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I completely removed the stuff about technical writing because I added the technical writing to my supports for my thesis. Originally, the technical writing was going to be an after note, but in the revision, it becomes an integral part to my essay.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

• The closing wraps up my entire essay now instead of just touching on technical writing and going, "bye". I also re arranged the order of the sentences drastically.

Editorial report 15a

Here is my first editorial report for the final self-reflection project.

ORIGINAL and REVISED Ethics paragraph

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I completely reworded what I was trying to say. The content is the same, but the order is much more logical and the wording is much clearer.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I split the long paragraph into two and added citations.

Peer review 15b for Julia Davenport

The last peer review I am completing for this course features Julia Davenport's Video essay and my comments.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I decided to make form suggestions.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

• I suggested adding a grabber and making the two intro slides shorter.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• Something Sean told me when I was creating my own video essay was to grab the attention of the audience within the first 30 seconds of a video essay and let them know what the entire video will be about. Julia has the what but not the grabber.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I liked how honest she was. What she said about being on camera or tape really resounded with me. Her candidness truly helped us understand her writing process and experience in this course.

Peer Review 15a for Ben Barnett

This week's peer review features Ben Barnett's rough draft for his podcast on the final self-reflection. My comments on this blog post can be found here.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I tried suggesting content changes.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

• I suggested that Ben should add some evidence to his claims. As it is hard to add empirical evidence to a reflection on a writing process, I suggested that he should talk about the changing quality of his writing as the quality of his lifestyle improved due to developing good habits. I also suggested he talk about the pride he takes in his work- if he loves his finished work then he truly had a successful semester in English.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• I reminded him of the rubric of the self-reflection where it suggests for you to reference your past work as evidence.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I loved the light-hearted humor that was infused throughout the podcast script. I feel like humor is a really good tool to use when reflecting on one's past actions (especially for the majority of us who made bad choices)

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

Here is the rough draft for my [final self-reflection].

Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know

• I hope this paper is relevant enough to the guide lines of this project. I tried to talk about aspects of the writing process that are unique to myself and I can't really tell if it remains focused enough or I'm on a tangent.

Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)

• I know it is wordy right now and plan to revise it by cutting the word count.

Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

• I feel like mine is relatively interesting and unique, so hopefully, it captures the attention of the audience.

Content outline for Final Project

Okie dokie. Here is the [content outline] for my final project in this class, The Self-Reflection.

Production Report 14a

For my first production report this week, I'll create a the intro of my self reflection. This way I can try to focus my project at the beginning of the process. Of course, I often completely re-write the intro at the end of the writing process, but I feel like starting and ending with the intro is very helpful to me. Huh. Maybe I should add that information to my self-reflection...

The part of my outline in regards to my intro is as follows:

Outline Item: Intro [Link to entire outline]

• Refer back to the very first blog post we did that talks about what we think our writing process is.
• Stress-baking is a thing. Relate baking to writing to start the analogies of the body paragraphs.

Adaptation of outline item: [Link to rough Draft]

Audience Questions:
How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? 

• I have a very basic standard college essay format for the intro. There is a grabber and a thesis statement in the intro that is an average length for a college essay.

How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

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How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?