Sunday, March 27, 2016

Peer Review 9B for Grant Williams

Switching genres, I will now peer review Grant William's Project 2 Draft essay. 

Here is a link to my feedback on Grant's blog

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed 
I decided to focus on content because we all have a pretty good grasp on standard collee essay form.
An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback
Often I find writing the intro to a writing project to be the hardest. Grant starts the essay immediately introducing an interviewee and not the paper itself. He definitely needs to add an intro to let the audience know the point of the project.  It would able be great if he introduced the rhetorical concepts.
An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback
Standard college esssays need intros, a body, a conclusion and a thesis. I merely pointed out which were lacking in his intro. His content was amazingly detailed and extremely well-written.
One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from
I loved the use of subtle descriptive language. He quotes his interviewees and adds just a single word of description that completely sets the tone of the quote and allows one to imagine exactly how it was said.

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