Editorial report 15b

Here is my first editorial report for the final self-reflection project.

ORIGINAL and REVISED Closing paragraph

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I completely removed the stuff about technical writing because I added the technical writing to my supports for my thesis. Originally, the technical writing was going to be an after note, but in the revision, it becomes an integral part to my essay.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

• The closing wraps up my entire essay now instead of just touching on technical writing and going, "bye". I also re arranged the order of the sentences drastically.

Editorial report 15a

Here is my first editorial report for the final self-reflection project.

ORIGINAL and REVISED Ethics paragraph

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I completely reworded what I was trying to say. The content is the same, but the order is much more logical and the wording is much clearer.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I split the long paragraph into two and added citations.

Peer review 15b for Julia Davenport

The last peer review I am completing for this course features Julia Davenport's Video essay and my comments.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I decided to make form suggestions.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

• I suggested adding a grabber and making the two intro slides shorter.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• Something Sean told me when I was creating my own video essay was to grab the attention of the audience within the first 30 seconds of a video essay and let them know what the entire video will be about. Julia has the what but not the grabber.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I liked how honest she was. What she said about being on camera or tape really resounded with me. Her candidness truly helped us understand her writing process and experience in this course.

Peer Review 15a for Ben Barnett

This week's peer review features Ben Barnett's rough draft for his podcast on the final self-reflection. My comments on this blog post can be found here.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I tried suggesting content changes.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

• I suggested that Ben should add some evidence to his claims. As it is hard to add empirical evidence to a reflection on a writing process, I suggested that he should talk about the changing quality of his writing as the quality of his lifestyle improved due to developing good habits. I also suggested he talk about the pride he takes in his work- if he loves his finished work then he truly had a successful semester in English.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• I reminded him of the rubric of the self-reflection where it suggests for you to reference your past work as evidence.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I loved the light-hearted humor that was infused throughout the podcast script. I feel like humor is a really good tool to use when reflecting on one's past actions (especially for the majority of us who made bad choices)

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

Here is the rough draft for my [final self-reflection].

Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know

• I hope this paper is relevant enough to the guide lines of this project. I tried to talk about aspects of the writing process that are unique to myself and I can't really tell if it remains focused enough or I'm on a tangent.

Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)

• I know it is wordy right now and plan to revise it by cutting the word count.

Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

• I feel like mine is relatively interesting and unique, so hopefully, it captures the attention of the audience.

Content outline for Final Project

Okie dokie. Here is the [content outline] for my final project in this class, The Self-Reflection.

Production Report 14a

For my first production report this week, I'll create a the intro of my self reflection. This way I can try to focus my project at the beginning of the process. Of course, I often completely re-write the intro at the end of the writing process, but I feel like starting and ending with the intro is very helpful to me. Huh. Maybe I should add that information to my self-reflection...

The part of my outline in regards to my intro is as follows:

Outline Item: Intro [Link to entire outline]

• Refer back to the very first blog post we did that talks about what we think our writing process is.
• Stress-baking is a thing. Relate baking to writing to start the analogies of the body paragraphs.

Adaptation of outline item: [Link to rough Draft]

Audience Questions:
How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? 

• I have a very basic standard college essay format for the intro. There is a grabber and a thesis statement in the intro that is an average length for a college essay.

How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

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How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

Production Report 14b

Post Title: Production Report

Audience Questions

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?
2. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

Author Response

Choose an item off your Content Outline for Project 2. Copy n’ paste it into the blog post, and clearly state which section of the outline it comes from.

Show us how you adapted that item into some raw, rough material (to work with during next week’s editing process) by sharing the raw copy with us. You can upload a small excerpt of audio or video, or you can copy n’ paste a short section of essay or QRG text. Or you can give us a working hyperlink to a short excerpt of audio, video or text from your project.

Clearly label “Outline Item” and “Adaptation of Outline Item” in the blog post. Then provide concise but specific answers to the two audience questions listed above.

8a	Choose an item for any section of your project.
8b	Choose an item from some other section of your project (not the same section you chose for 8a)

Total point value for each Content Report, with all conventions followed: 25 points (5 for the outline item + 10 for easy access to raw content + 5 per detailed response to questions)

Applied to: Project 2 Process Work (30% of Project 2, which is 25% of your Course Grade)

Conventions of a Blog Post A title A “lead” or introductory section that clearly states what the post is about Short paragraphs Spaces between paragraphs (use of white space) Working hyperlinks Organizational strategies are encouraged (like using bullets, tables, charts and other ways of organizing information)

Production Schedule for Final Project

With finals coming it is really imrpotant to schedule our time wisely. Here is a production schedule for the self-reflection paper.

What is to be done

• Open post to peer reviewers: COMPLETE BY MAY 3. Since I am writing an essay, I don't really have the locations planned out because I can just write parts in between activityies thoughout my days, though I will probably tackle the writing all at one in huge blocks of time.
• opening: May 1. Almost done with it tonight (production report 14a)
• body 1: May 1. Also almost done with it (production report 14b)
• body 2: May 2. Planning on using time I have now that labs are ended on Monday.
• body 3: May 2. Also planning on using that free lab time.
• closing: May 3. Use Tuesday class time, along with speaking with my peers about our assignments.
• Editorial report 15a: COMPLETE BY MAY 4. Editorial reports are chill. It is hardest to produce the initial parts.
• Editorial report 15b
• Peer Review 15a: COMPLETE BY MAY 4. I may get these out of the way a little earlier, depending on how quickly my peers open up their projects for review.
• Peer review 15b

Location

• My dorm, friends dorms/ studyrooms
• library
• Tuesday class time

Resources required

• Laptop, google docs/ microsoft word, internet, willpower

Date completed

• N/A yet

Changes made after completion & reasons why

• N/A yet

Peer Review 14a for Alexis Morrison

This week's peer review features Alexis Morrison's Content Outline.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I decided to make some outlining suggestions

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

• I tried to help Alexis by suggesting to put a broader context around her work. She already has a plan for her body paragraphs so I made some suggestions for her closing.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• The rubric says one can talk about their high school wrinting and ocmpare it to now and Alexis is doing that which is great. But it would be cool to explore the future of her writing too which she can explore in her closing, which I commented on.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I like how Alexis is going to bring some previous work into her essay. I think it will be a really interesting comparison and really show the changes in her writing process.

Peer Review 14b for Fernando Coronado

The second peer review this week is Fernando Coronado's Content Outline.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I made a outlining suggestion for Fernando.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?

• Fernando talks solely of time management but I feel like what he said about time management is true for all of us. I advised him to bring in some elements into his self reflection where her truly personalized his essay to himself and talked about some of the unique parts of his writing process.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• According to the self-reflection rubric, we should focus on some of a list of possible topics (that first list of time management, research, editing, new tech, etc). I pointed out that Fernando should broaden out his paper a little. In his case it was too specific as it focused only on time management.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I liked how his outline was organized by project. Personally, I'm still trying to decide if my outline should be organized by project or process.