Editorial Report 12a

One of the parts I re-edited is the intro of my video essay:

Original intro | edited intro

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I added information on the huge media storm that occurred after Alice Dreger live-tweeted her son's abstinence only sex ed class.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

• I also added a grabber and title page.