Peer Review 12b for Gabby Dietrich

For this one of this week's peer reviews I'm reviewing Gabby Dietrich's video essay on the Flint, Michigan Water Scandal. Here are the comments I posted on her blog.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I decided to make a content suggestion for Gabby's video essay.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

• Gabby spends a lot of effort making logical appeals to the audience. However, her proposed solution to problems caused by lack of allocation of federal resources on poverty stricken towns is to increase national taxes. As most taxpayers would protest vehemently to an increase of taxes, I suggested to Gabby to make emotional appeals to the audience. She could do this by focusing on the effects lead poisoning had on the people of the town and show interview footage and heart wrenching photos.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• We learned in the previous project the different types of appeals writers can use to convince their audiences of something and I suggested to add some pathos to the logos.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• The flow of the argument was pretty smooth. I liked how she set up the situation and talked about the events/policy that lead up to this event.