Peer Review 12a for Payton Leahy

For the first of this week's peer reviews I'm reviewing Payton Leahy's video essay on #FreeKesha. Here are the comments I posted on her blog.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

• I decided to make a form suggestion for Payton's video essay.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

• Payton spends the entire video speaking into the camera without showing any picture or audio sources. Instead, she quotes the sources or describes people when this can be done more effectively by showing the actual sources. For example, she quotes some of Kesha's tweets, which are integral to explaining the situation, verbally instead of visually.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

• I tried to remind Payton of the conventions of a video essay where some of the evidence should be in the form of video/audio/picture sources.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I enjoyed her presence on camera. Even though she was clearly uncomfortable at times and reading off a script, when she did look into the camera and just spoke about the injustice of Kesha's situation, her passion on the topic was clear.